Monica Diaz-Jimenez
PAS 113B
Professor D.A. Broadous
March 21, 2012
Understanding
Poverty
Imagine all individuals in America
living in peace and harmony, Adults and children going to sleep in a warm cozy
bed, and looking forward to each day as they wake up.
With a job and a home, every family would have the fundamental requirement to a
decent lifestyle.
Unfortunately, about half of the
population in America is living in poverty.
The basic needs to survive have been destroyed.
But how is that so? You may ask yourself.
America is known as the ideal state to live in because of the opportunities.
Correct? No matter what educational background you may have, one still has the chance
to obtain a job. Humans are capable of
solving problems, yet one out of two people are living in poverty today.
This unfortunate epidemic has grown drastically over the years and it is
changing and impacting civilians in a psychological and sociological way.
How can someone become poor? This is
a question that has numerous answers. There is always a unique circumstance
that puts an individual in poverty. For
instance, one may say that drugs are a leading cause.
An addiction to a substance can lead individuals to act in an unethical manner.
The infatuation towards drugs becomes the main focus for an addict that all
their responsibilities no longer exist.
And soon, they have nothing to survive on but drugs.
As the PBS video, “Remaking America” states, “Something bad with one’s
character”. Others are born into poverty. They
do not fall into bad choices; they simply were brought up in that atmosphere.
Violence and abuse may also be a reason for one to fall into poverty.
Currently,
the recession in the United States has been the main cause for poverty. Individuals across the country have lost
their jobs. Citizens were not prepared for an
overnight notification. The accumulation of
the personal savings that citizens collected was not enough to continue with
the same life style as they were used to. As the prices kept increasing, people didn’t
have the significant amount of money to continue to buy their needs.
Soon enough, affording groceries was one of the least of the issues.
Paying the utility bills became nearly impossible.
Homeowners quickly lapsed into an economic stress, which led to an unwanted
outcome.
Reality took action, and families started losing their homes.
A total of 2,871,891 homes were foreclosed in the United States (Realty Trac
Staff). In California alone, “546,669 homes received
a foreclosure” (Realty Trac Staff).
These statistics show how many people’s life changed with the recession.
Bank repossessions led families to become homeless.
As
a result of families losing their homes, there comes an occasion when they
often get separated for multiple reasons.
Envision the sensation one would experience knowing that you are without a home.
Everything that you called your own is completely vanished.
That warn cozy bed you slept in, will no longer be the bed you slumber in.
Finding help within ones family is the first option.
There are times when the children are able to stay with a family member, while
each parent gets help somewhere else.
But when one doesn’t have anywhere to go, they do not have another choice but
to go to a homeless shelter to find help.
An organization can provide one with
basic needs, for instance a place to sleep and food.
The transition one may have to adapt to is awful.
Living in a home filled with basic needs to survive is something people do not
think about losing. As one reaches help,
there are standards that each facility enforces.
For instance, “families have access to their room from 5:00p.m. in the evening
to 8:30a.m. the next morning” (Schultz-krohn).
This example demonstrates that although there are places that offer shelter in
those in need, one needs to follow the rules.
In addition to shelter’s standards, “Families are not allowed to remain in the
shelter during the day but are expected to be seeking housing, employment, or
attending job-training programs” (Schultz-Krohn). Therefore, it is important to
seek a solution. Finding another job is
important to rebuild their life. Beyond to what
a facility has to offer, there are other things to recognize.
American
residents are being affected every day because of poverty.
If one looks up the word poverty, this is how it is defined, “the state or
condition of having little or no money, goods, or means of support; condition
of being poor” (Dictionary). Of course, it
is simple to look it up at get an idea of what the word itself means, but it’s
not just a definition that one can look up.
For Instance, living in the Los Angeles area, one is capable of attaching a
detailed picture to this definition in their mind.
In
the paths of LA, one can usually find a homeless individual walking or simply
standing in a spot while asking for money. Usually
they’ll be holding up a sign, waiting to receive some help.
Their appearance usually consists with, matted hair, dull skin, and worn out
clothes.
When walking by an individual with these characteristics, it is often that an
unpleasant odor will be passed through the wind. There
are times when the individual may simply have no energy to ask for help.
Quickly they isolate themselves from society, with the sensitivity that they do
not belong with the rest of the individuals in the community.
The situation they dealt with through their life will never be seen with the
naked eye. One can only see what they have
become.
With this in mind, one may be more sympathetic.
It is important to recognize that despite the situations they are currently in,
they continue to be a human being.
As
a matter of fact, their state of mind has most certainly been damaged.
Hope is no longer a feeling when a homeless individual has continuously
struggled to survive. The few possessions
that they have, means a significant amount to them.
They protect everything they have left, a destroyed blanket, sleeping bag, even
a cardboard box that they use to rest on top of.
It is important to differentiate their image and their story.
To clarify, understanding the circumstance that an individual is facing while
in poverty will help give the society enough dedication towards developing a
solution.
Giving
poor individuals an opportunity to get help is certainly a great action.
However, decreasing the poor population is the only solution to this
problematic condition. Each year the amount
of homeless people increase. A CNN writer
states, “nearly 36 million Americans lived in poverty in 2003” (Blanco1).
36 million is a significant large number, but today there is approximately 150
million Americans living in poverty (Remaking America).
To formulate, in seven years the poverty population amplified significantly.
If the United States would implement a solution to decrease this data, citizens
would avoid the psychological and sociological crisis.
Humans are capable of creating opportunities in order to live a stable life, so
why is poverty a never ending issue?
Christina Payne
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Evidence: The evidence in your paper was good. You used many relevant facts, and statistics. The quotes you used helped a lot to analyze the story more. I really liked how you used questions to catch the reader’s attention. I also liked how you included that they had only a certain time they could stay at the homeless shelters because I didn’t know that.
Structure: The structure of your essay was good. The essay flowed well together, although I would add transitions between paragraphs. Some of the words were missed spelled, along with some run-on sentences.
Organization: The organization of the paper was good. It was clear there was an introduction, body paragraphs, but there was no conclusion. The conclusion is the most important part of the essay. The conclusion should reinstate the main points of your essay.
Tone: The tone is consistent throughout the whole paper which is good. The tone in your paper was very serious, and sympathetic. You really interact with the reader by asking questions and making them think about them.
Audience: The audience of your paper is generally to everyone. This makes who you are talking to informal.
Meaning: The meaning of your paper needs to relate more to space, and throw away people. Also I would include how poverty has impacted the person psychologically, and sociologically.
Divya Pithiya peer critiquing Monica Diaz-Jimenez
ReplyDeleteVoice/Tone: The tone of your essay is very informational and makes the essay flow smoothly.
Evidence: Make sure that all of your facts are cited. Also make sure your facts are accurate. They are very interesting and relevant to your points. Well done!
Organization/Structure: The introduction paragraph catches the readers attention, but does not have enough detail. I would suggest to add more detail and information in the introduction. It would strengthen your essay. The body of the essay is well put together. You ask a lot of questions, I would suggest to stay away from that and just go straight to the point.
Audience: Your audience is not specific to any group of people. It is to anyone and everyone.
Meaning: The overall meaning of your essay is to inform people of poverty and how they should help. You end with a question, which keeps the reader wondering how they can help poverty. Good job!
Your thesis was clear and strong. I knew exactly what you were going to be discussing. Your audience was easy to identify. You made it clear that we are capable of solving problems. Your voice was very strong, you took a stand went for it. I liked how you ended it with a cliff hanger. You proved your point and you gave evidence to support your points. Everything was relevant. Your stats were accurate. You quoted and cited correctly. The tone of your essay stayed the same throughout your paper. Your paper was well organized and flowed accordingly. You discussed the psychological, sociological, space and throw away people. Your structure was well developed. You stayed on topic and easily transitioned to the next. You had a few missing words and you mixed up some words. Include your volunteering experience.
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